79
Moderator Post[MODPOST] May Chapterfy writing contest! Big prizes and other fun stuff!(self.WritingPrompts)
submitted 1 decade, 2 years ago* (edited 1 week, 4 days after) by RyanKinderFounder / Co-Lead Mod to /r/WritingPrompts (18.8m)
INTRODUCTION
I'll open with a TL;DR, but you ought to read everything below:
TL;DR: Read the...
since 1 decade, 2 years ago
29 of 29
Tip Reveddit Real-Time can notify you when your content is removed.
your account history
Tip Check if your account has any removed comments.
view my removed comments you are viewing a single comment's thread.
view all comments
Submission: Vivi E Lascia Vivere- http://chapterfy.com/p/s-37b6b8ee5a1f9aa5a4f8a6598bfabeb0/ - Word Count: 2,255 words.
Am I doing this wrong, or is this just the first submission? I'll correct it if it's wrong. Also, does anyone know when the voting is so I don't miss it?
Here is the street view I used if anyone is curious. Also open to answer any other questions people might have.
You're the first submission! Congratulations.
You don't need to write [CC] though. I mentioned that people could make [CC] posts on the subreddit to seek critiques before submitting any of their entries. :)
Help!! I want to read his prompt but I can't connect to Chapterfy!!
Works for me. What kind of error do you get?
OH it's working now! Thanks :0
It says my server won't connect! I tried switching but chrome and safari both fail to connect.
Cool, thanks. Should I take it down? I was really hoping to get critiques on it. Or is that not allowed on this one, because it's a competition?
Do as you wish, you can edit as much as you like until the deadline. Just edit out the CC part here and make your own separate posts seeking critiques. :)
Hey, sorry about this again, but I forgot to ask. Has the voting dates been decided yet? I don't want to miss them.
Voting takes place the week following the deadline.
The link wont embed.
Did you copy/paste from the chapterfy url?
Im on mobile so i couldnt.
Heres my rough draft. Could you help me? Im not much a writer yet. (chapterfy.com/r/the-unexpected-arrival/)
I can deff try to give it a shot. I don;t know when it will be though, it's the last week of classes, then finals =/
Cool. Good luck.
Awesome, thank you very much
You have a few grammar mistakes. It should be "whip us up" not the other way around. There are a few more i saw like missing letters.
I am not too keen on the depressing stories. But I think that you probably wrote the best of what you made of it.
Hahah, I'd like to think the story isn't too awfully depressing. Thanks for the input! Someone else mentioned grammar, I plan on going back and correcting the mistakes as soon as I get the time!
My take on the prompt is that people are getting sucked into google maps like the matrix. They can only exit from where they first used their device. I am not a very talented yet, but I think my ideas can mostly outweigh my lack of experience!
Could you read my other story that I posted called The Criminal and tell me how well I wrote it? The short story is finished to me.
Nice idea, very creative. I definitely can look at it and let you know what I think, but just so you know, I've never done any writing before, except for one other WP which only got one reply, so I'm probably really not very qualified to give any criticism. I can still let you know what I personally think, but take everything I say with a grain of salt. Also, I'm pretty busy today, so it might not be until tomorrow.
Just finished reading it!! That was a very enjoyable read!! I got a clear view of how your character lives and his personality. Somewhat depressing, yet very intriguing. A very good story that could fit into a novel very easily. You could go lots of places with this character, if you decide to continue it. Nice job!
I found a few minor grammar mistakes, and I'll relay them if you haven't been made aware.
Your*
I'm not 100% sure but i think it should be a colon instead of a semi-colon.
There isn't really a mistake, but I found this fragment a little discomfiting. It kind of felt oddly placed. I think it would work better if you placed it directly after this sentence:
That's just my opinion though. Again, those are all very, very minor mistakes, but they're the only ones I picked up on! Anyway, I think your story was compelling and well-written. It was also well-placed, which is always important in writing, melting into new ideas with ease and grace. Would definitely read more of it , if there was more!! Great job!!
Thanks so much! I have a lot of time to revise, which I plan to utilize. I think I'm going to make it third person. I especially appreciate the grammar corrections, as they can really make or break a piece. I actually recently changed the ending, where the main character hinted at drinking more, but it wasn't explicit, but I think the darker tone fits a bit more. I also plan to change some bits and ends here and there to make it flow better, as it seems awkward to me in some places. I also got advice to go more in depth in certain places (the relationship with Clara, for example.)
I'm kinda drunk right now, so not right now, but as I said, I've got time. Thanks again for the feedback.
You're welcome!! And yeah, it's a good thing to expand upon some ideas!! Clara would definitely be a good place to add some more details, but I also thinks it fits the character a bit, to not dive into too much detail, as he was just briefly thinking of her. So it works really either way, I think! Good luck, though, wherever you decide to take the story!! :)
Thanks! I submitted a CC post of this and one person thought it might be agood idea to delve into it a bit more, possibly even going into the deeper "between the sheets" details of the post, which I might follow. Thanks again, I really do appreciate it.
Cool! Can't wait to read the final piece!!
Thank you very much =)
No problem!! :)